Humanities Essay Planning

Text-Abomination

Author- Robert Swindell

Breaches of HR article 1 in text

-Breach means to not have followed it or broken it.

Article 1= All human beings are born free and equal in dignity and rights. They are endowed with reason and conscience and should act towards one another in a spirit of brotherhood.

-Means no one is born different from others-can't be born into slavery and kept in a cage.

-you have access to basic human rights-food,water, shelter.

Martha-born into a religious cult, has basic rights but no personal freedom. She is treated like a slave by her parents.*quotes-no friends because righteous, not allowed radio=Mother says they are raised in darkness like the heathens (pg7) The righteous believe the devil reaches young people through music (pg11), I know I seem weird to them but it's not me, inside I'm just like them (pg18). -Main story idea, makes us feel empathy/depressed sympathy for Martha, we forgive Martha for keeping the secret about Jim because she is also suffering. Yes-she went to live with her sister, gets new clothes, not treated like a slave or treated differently.

Abomination/Jim- born and kept in a cage, not allowed outside. Has basic rights. Lost rights to education, love, freedom, socialisation. No clothes! *quotes-kid in basement, Jim doesn't see his mum= "Abomination's a boy Scott. A little boy. He lives in the cellar in a cage"(pg143) "and she lets her kid live in a cage?....She doesn't know!"(pg146) Martha tells to Scott. Good story telling, build suspense + tension, to make you feel a certain way and feel sorry for Jim, feel angry at her parents, shows negative influence of bullying. Resolved- gets to socialise, sees his mum, clothes, freedom, privacy, love. Trauma- long term effect, not going to have a normal life, learning hard.

Land March

 

We have been learning about the Maori land march we have made this map of the North island marking out where their march begun and where it finished and all of the places they stayed along the way.

Q.what worked well?

We found a quicker way to get the map finished after a failed attempt of saving our first one that took us a long time to do.

Q.What was challenging?

We were having trouble saving our first copy and it all got deleted and wasn't saved so we had to start again.

Q.what would you do differently next time?

Next time I would try and get it done quicker instead of taking ages to finish it. 

Martha sympathy chart

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 Adverbs

-Suddenly, the silence wasn't so quiet.

-Enthusiastically, I scram out of bed ready for my first day of school.

-Unfortunately, cancer won the battle.

-Quietly, I sneak out ignoring the sensible voice in my head.

Preposition 

-On the roof, is my lazy cat bathing in the sun's rays.

-Above the fireplace, are memories encased in frames.

-Behind me, a black figure slowly approaches out from shadow.

-Under the stairs, my brother hides waiting to be found.

Punctuation sentences

Silently, the cat stalked it's prey.

In 1975, a high school was finally built in Hornby. 

Amongst the papers, I found my homework.

Anxiously, I awaited my test results.

Fortunately, the kai today was something good.

About twenty years ago, a law was passed that changed everything.

Often the things, we say and the things we mean are two different things.

Cautiously, he knocked on the principals door and await a reply.

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 The power sentence.

If you waffle a lot, try starting your sentence with a power statement of 12 words or less.

Example= Money is the route of all evil.

                What is right, isn't always popular.

                Hard work leads to positive results.

                Antarctica is bitterly freezing.

                English is clearly the best subject.

The 'red, white and blue' sentence:

Use this sentence style when you have several ideas to convey about a topic.

Example= Successful students are focused, hard-working and punctual.

                                                                               Red               white                    blue            

The earths key resources are clean air, fresh water and natural environments.

Sunshine, water and friends make for a perfect weekend adventure.     

Apples are juicy, crunchy and tasty.

Late night drives, blasting music and delicious snacks create the perfect vibes.

Tropical juices, hot sand and calming waters; A vacation away.

 Horses are, powerful, strong and incredible creatures. 

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 The 'w' sentence- makes the sentence sound thoughtful and knowledgeable.

Remember the rule: not every 'w' word works as a sentence starter.

                                Remember to put the comma in when the parts 

                                affected by your 'w' word are finished.

Examples- who, while, when, whereas, where, what, whilst, with.

Whilst the class was eating, I read my book.

Where you like chocolate, others prefer candy.

What goes around, comes around.

With my school bag on, I sprinted to school.

What looked like chocolate, was actually dog poo.

With my brother, I snuck the candy from the lolly jar.

Whilst I was sleeping, my brothers started world war 3 in the living room.

While I was chewing gum, I got told to spit it out.

The 'ing' sentence

Use the- ing version of the verb e.g to run-running 

Remember the rule- when you finish your 'ing' phrase, place a comma, then write the rest of the sentence.

Some 'ing' words- listening, running, watching, realising, emerging, grasping, speaking, signalling, exposing, gossiping, acknowledging.

Examples= Realising the danger, people fled from the cities.

                  Shaking away the nerves, he walked towards the mic.

                  Acknowledging the speaker, he bowed his head in silence.

                 Running away from my brother, I tripped and fell.

                 Listening carefully, I eagerly wait to scare my little cousin. 

                 Watching my mum do the dishes, I pray she doesn't ask for my help.

                 Waiting for my mum to get home, I start on my chores.

                 Gorging down a meatball sub, I start to feel sick.

The 'ed' sentence 

Use the ed version of the verb e.g to jog, jogged. This makes for a punchy sentence starter.

Remember the rule-when you finish your ed phrase, place a comma, then write the rest of your sentence. 

Some ed words- Frustrated, surprised, excited, committed, undaunted, determined, overpowered, concerned, cornered, delighted, enthralled.

Examples-Determined to win, Tony pushed himself to the last metres of the sprint.

                 Concerned for the welfare of others, the prime minister passed new laws.

                 Frustrated by the ongoing rain, I stared out of the window.

Overpowered by my brothers, I back away from the fight.

Delighted by the aroma of freshly baked cookies, I go and try one.

Surprised about my test results, I run to tell my mum.

Enchanted by the view, a bird flies across the sky.      

                  

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 The adverb sentence:

Adverbs describe verbs. e.g surprisingly, confusingly, firstly, Remarkably, often.

Adverb sentence starters add interest or intrigue to our work.

Remember the rule: When you start a sentence with an adverb, place a comma after the adverb then write the rest of the sentence. 

Examples- accidentally, shockingly, concerningly, excitedly, significantly, similarly, simply.

-Simply, I added the milk to the batter.

-Shockingly, the lunch today was served hot.

-Accidentally, I poured hot sauce in my fish tank.

-Concerningly, my boss doesn't know how to do his job.

-Unfortunately, my brother came home from camp.

-Suddenly, a little man came out of my fridge.

-Surprisingly, I got my work finished.

-weakly, I punched my brother in the back.

-Quietly, I snuck out of my house. 

-Thankfully, my mum didn't catch me.

-Quickly, I chased after my dog who ran off the leash.

The prepositions sentence:   

Examples- In, against, between, over, behind, within, under, below, at, for, throughout, near, about

A preposition gives location or movement.

Remember the rule: when you start the sentence with a preposition, you need to put a comma when the movement or position ends.

In the beginning, we talked a lot.

Throughout the lesson, I tried not to fall asleep.

Near the basketball court, is the rubbish bin.

In my house, I have a kitchen.

At lunchtime, I had my food.

Near the dairy, there is a playground.

Above the fireplace, there is a picture frame.

Between 2 and 3 o'clock, I get excited.